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Apologies by ~protege--moi:iconprotege--moi:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open




That trick's been used too many times.
I'm sorry I can't be gullable.
Sincere apologies.

She sees and she yearns
the magic upon your fingertips.

Those words have been spoken too many times.
I'm sorry I can't be easy to please.
Sincere apologies.

She hears and she needs
the tone of your voice in her memory.

Those lips have been kissed too many times.
I'm sorry I can't be fooled easily.
Sincere apologies.

She feels and she craves
the smoothness of your skin.

And most of all, I'm sorry that I'm not sorry for any of those things.

She sits and she sighs
And waits by the window
For instinct to murder rationality
and sweep her away.
©2006-2009 ~protege--moi
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:iconbwennyy:
~Bwennyy Jun 30, 2006, 6:48:24 AM
:)

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// Love me!
Brendan //
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~AnyWayTheWindBlows Jun 30, 2006, 8:28:04 AM
this is really good, even if it's sad. one critical point i have to make is that you misspelled "gullable." i'm not trying to be mean, i just know that, personally, i hate seeing spelling mistakes in my works, so i try to help others.

"She sits and she sighs
And waits by the window
For instinct to murder rationality
and sweep her away."

i adore that part. i can relate to it soooooooo much.

great work =)

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"You'll stay with me?" "Until the very end."

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~sting-ray Jun 30, 2006, 4:54:16 PM
reeeaaallly good. <---- how imaginative...
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~AbundantAmenities Jun 30, 2006, 6:48:35 PM
I really like this! The only problem I have with it is the 'most of all i'm sorry for being sorry' maybe try and change the language around a bit? Other than that, this is AMAZING. The creativity, mood, everything. Wonderful daaahling.

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This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
This is the way the world ends
Not with a bang, but a whimper
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~fuziness Jun 30, 2006, 7:08:37 PM
The part in italics sounds very primal o.O, like your fighting basic human instinct. If you took the italics bit out, I reckon you'd have another poem =P.
I like how you lied in the poem haha =]. "sincere apologies", and then "And most of all, I'm sorry that I'm not sorry for any of those things" makes it quite cynical =]
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~protege--moi Jun 30, 2006, 9:24:20 PM
Thank you so much for pointing that out!
I know you're not trying to be mean:) - I'd hate to have a spelling mistake in this.

Also, thank you for your kind words:love:

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xoxo protege--moi . :blowkiss:
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~protege--moi Jun 30, 2006, 9:26:28 PM
:D Thank you so much for the fav

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xoxo protege--moi . :blowkiss:
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